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Learner writes a short paragraph that varies sentence length and structure, rather than one built entirely from complex sentences or entirely from simple ones.
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Six judgements. In two of them the simpler paragraph wins.
Which paragraph reads better?
A. Although cities are growing, services have not kept pace. Because budgets are fixed, councils cannot expand them. While demand rises, provision stays flat.
B. Cities are growing. Although services have not kept pace, budgets are fixed. Councils cannot expand them.
What the band asks for, what a short sentence does, and what an examiner sees.
The band asks for a variety of complex structures, and for frequent error-free sentences.
Two different complex structures beat four of the same one.
And every complex sentence you write is another place to lose control of.
Ten paragraphs. Four need nothing.
Sort each item into the correct category
Four complex sentences in a row. Rewrite two of them.
The paragraph as written
Although city populations are rising, public services have not expanded. Because council budgets are fixed in real terms, managers cannot hire more staff. While demand grows every year, provision stays flat. Since nothing is likely to change soon, waiting times will keep rising.
Sentence 2, rewritten as a SIMPLE sentence:
Sentence 4, rewritten with the leaning half at the END:
One paragraph, one simple sentence, two link words.
Topic: whether governments should fund public transport.
Four sentences. At least one of them simple. At least two different link words across the paragraph.
Do not open more than one sentence with a leaning half.
Four sentences.
One word per sentence: simple or complex.
Name the two sentences that sounded alike.