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Plain and Ornate
Two footbridges over the same stream.
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Both get you over. One of them took a week to build.
Learner chooses the plain join, the repeated noun and the ordinary paragraph break over more impressive alternatives, and stops treating cohesion as a display of range.
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Six pairs. Twice the ornate version wins.
A: The scheme was extended. The scheme now covers four boroughs. B: The initiative was extended. The programme now covers four boroughs. Which?
What the criterion measures, what each device costs, and what this is not.
Whether the reader can follow the text.
Not how many devices you deployed.
Four chapters have handed you a toolbox. This sprint is where you are told you may put most of it down.
Two footbridges over the same stream.
Both get you over. One of them took a week to build.
Ten passages. Four go in as written.
Sort each item into the correct category
Four passages written twice. Neither version is wrong.
Content: the scheme was extended, and it now covers four boroughs. Plain: Ornate: I would submit:
Content: rents rose, and households left the eastern boroughs. Plain: Ornate: I would submit:
Content: the trial ran six months, and the results were mixed. Plain: Ornate: I would submit:
As plain as you can while staying followable.
Prompt: should museums charge for entry?
Box 1: two body paragraphs, written as plainly as they can be while still being followable. Box 2: name one device you could have used and deliberately did not.
Plain is not the same as disconnected. Every join still has to be clear.
As plain as they can be.
One or two sentences.
What would it have bought, and what would it have cost?