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The Cohesion Check
Four couplings: one right, one doubled, one on the wrong ring, one missing.
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Four gaps between five wagons. Only one of them is right.
Learner repairs an over-linked text and an under-linked one, with nothing saying which is which.
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The chapter assembled, the unfamiliar direction, and which question wins.
Fares rose. However, revenue increased. Moreover, numbers fell.
1 Relationship real? no — twice
2 Delete it? revenue: no
numbers: yes
3 All one kind? yes — two adverbs
4 Joined to nothing? no
✓ Fares rose, and revenue increased. Numbers fell.
Four couplings: one right, one doubled, one on the wrong ring, one missing.
Four gaps between five wagons. Only one of them is right.
Four repairs. Two delete, one replaces, one adds.
1. Fares rose sharply. However, ticket revenue increased.
Is the relationship the word claims really there? The actual relationship is . Repaired: Fares rose sharply. , ticket revenue increased.
2. The factory closed in March. As a result, four hundred people lost their jobs.
Is the relationship really there? Would deleting the word lose anything? Repaired: The factory closed in March. Four hundred people lost their jobs.
3. An essay whose four paragraphs open However · Moreover · However · Furthermore.
Is the essay's cohesion all one kind? The essay fails at question . One repair for paragraph 3: replace However with a such as this decline.
4. Paragraph 2 ends on library closures. Paragraph 3 opens: Rising rents have pushed families out of the inner boroughs.
Is paragraph 3 joined to anything? The essay fails at question . Repaired opening: rents have pushed families out of the inner boroughs.
Two passages, opposite faults. Three spans are already right.
Passage A
Fares rose sharply in 2019. (1) However, ticket revenue increased. → Fares rose sharply in 2019. ticket revenue increased.
(2) Moreover, the operator cut services on four routes. → the operator cut services on four routes.
(3) Therefore, passenger numbers held steady. → passenger numbers held steady.
(4) Furthermore, the rise was judged a success by the board. → the rise was judged a success by the board.
(5) In addition, a second rise followed in 2021. → a second rise followed in 2021.
Passage B
(6) The council closed three libraries in the eastern boroughs. →
(7) These closures provoked protests outside the town hall. →
(8) Rising rents have pushed families out of those same boroughs. → rents have pushed families out of those same boroughs.
(9) School rolls have fallen in every one of them. →
(10) The council has announced a review of its closure programme. → the council has announced a review of its closure programme.
Three short body paragraphs, judged on how they join.
Plan — prompt: should city centres be closed to private cars?
Three short paragraphs, three or four sentences each.
Nothing here says how to join them.
Three or four sentences each.
Which way did you err before this chapter? And now?