Learner cuts a paragraph containing three undeveloped ideas down to one developed idea, and stops equating more ideas with more content.
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Five sentences. One belongs in another paragraph.
Five sentences. Four belong in one developed paragraph. One belongs somewhere else — put it last.
Six judgements, starting with a count.
How many separate claims are in this paragraph?
Free public transport has many advantages. It reduces traffic in city centres. It also helps the environment by cutting emissions. In addition, it saves money for people on low incomes, and it makes cities more attractive to visitors.
Three verbs, the arithmetic, and which one to keep.
The descriptor asks you to present, extend and support main ideas.
Listing four ideas meets the first verb and neither of the others.
Four claims with nothing under them is one idea's worth of credit, spread thin.
Ten paragraphs. Four are correct, two with more than one claim.
Sort each item into the correct category
Three shallow paragraphs. Name what you keep, then develop it.
1. Free public transport has many advantages. It reduces traffic in city centres. It also helps the environment by cutting emissions. In addition, it saves money for people on low incomes, and it makes cities more attractive to visitors.
Keep:
Develop it:
2. Homework is a problem. It tires children. It is unfair to families without a quiet room. It also takes time from sport and music, and it causes arguments at home.
Keep:
Develop it:
3. Cities should plant more trees. Trees lower street temperatures. They absorb rainwater. They make streets more pleasant and they improve air quality.
Keep:
Develop it:
A shallow paragraph rewritten as one developed idea.
The paragraph:
Free public transport has many advantages. It reduces traffic in city centres. It also helps the environment by cutting emissions. In addition, it saves money for people on low incomes, and it makes cities more attractive to visitors.
Rewrite it as ONE developed idea. Same word count or fewer.
Then say which claim you kept and why.
One idea, developed.
One or two sentences.
Say which deleted idea you still miss.